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A prose poem in ten parts.

In many ways, I've been trying to write this for years and years. Today I finally just did it. I'm still not 100% happy with it, but it's as close as I've come to putting this into proper words as I've ever gotten.
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Given 2013-11-02
In the prose poem Stories You Tell Your Children, "~SadisticIceCream"explores a controversial and deeply personal topic and handles it with elegance, honesty, and a marked lack of bitterness" (suggester's words). Thank you for responding respectfully. ( Suggested by LiliWrites and Featured by neurotype )
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DynamiteHearts Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I've grown up in a series of small, christian, redneck towns. I've grown up with an atheist for a mother and a devout catholic as an aunt and uncle, and I've grown up alongside Baptist extremists and atheist extremists alike as friends.
This piece is amazing and unapologetically raw, and I identify with it so much. I've been surrounded by so many people who love God and love religion, and I've always felt like there's something missing inside of me. The hallowed stomach part really got to me.
Thank you ♥
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2015   Writer
Thank you so much. :tighthug:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I've used your brilliant piece in a title poem, found here: liliwrites.deviantart.com/art/…

I hope you don't mind! :heart:
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2014   Writer
Of course I don't mind, I'm honored! It's a beautiful piece. I've been meaning to try writing one of these myself. :D
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thedreadpoetroberts Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2014  Student Writer
This really, really speaks monuments about things I have so much trouble explaining. Thank you for sharing. 
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014   Writer
Thank you you for reading and commenting, I appreciate it! :hug:
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allthegood1sRgone Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014

Just ran into this wonderful story.  I wish you luck with your recovery, many of us have had the same experience and you expressed it very nicely, especially the host wafer (LOL).

I also dropped by your page and read the New Year's piece.  The only advice I can give you on starting your life out as a new born grown-up is this.  Do as much as you can while you are young, travel, play, whatever.  Be adventurous.  It's going to get harder to do those things as you get older and settle into life.  And then there's children.  I'll shut up now.

Namaste

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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014   Writer
Thank you for stopping by and leaving me with your lovely thoughts, I really appreciate you taking the time to do so. :hug: I'm definitely trying to make the most of the free time I have now -- I know it can be fleeting. :)

:heart:
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014  Student Writer
I think you have a problem more with the confines of this thing religion than with God -- the God you were taught is a very different God than the one I think he would want you to know he is. I am sorry for this, and I understand this situation. Thank you for sharing, I hope others will realize how blessed they are not to be alone, and I hope maybe the love from this community will help to alleviate some of that in you. Hug 
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014   Writer
Thank you for your compassionate comment, I appreciate you taking the time to read this and leave your thoughts. :hug:
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tirasunil Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2014  Student Writer
Of course. :)
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HaveTales-WillTell Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2013  Professional Writer
Wow. Just, wow.

Kudos.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013   Writer
Thank you. :thanks: Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to you! I hope you're well. :hug:
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Moombeam36 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is quite beautiful. It's honest and unapologetic in the doubt, yet reverent still in light of the doubt. I second :iconthe-grim-sage: 's comment more or less. Since the subject is very controversial, I appreciate your courage to be so real in the depiction of reverence and doubt.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2013   Writer
Thank you -- I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment (although it's taken me forever to get back to you -- I'm so sorry about that!). :hug:
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the-Grim-Sage Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013
As a girl raised by her overly-devout Christian grandmother in a land of non-believers while learning to love the most heretical genre of music, this is the perfect combination of reverence and doubt. Powerful and moving and so very real. A real person's struggle. Excellently written!
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013   Writer
Why thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. :hug:
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DamonWakes Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
This is some amazing writing. There's a great sort of movement throughout--from belief, to questioning, to nostalgia--though I do wonder about the chronology of it. It seems odd to go put ages five, twelve, eight and seventeen in that order.

Congratulations on the DD, by the way. :-) Only just noticed that.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013   Writer
You know, I wrote this over three years ago and just re-read it when I got the DD, because I hadn't in ages, and you're exactly right about the chronology. :rofl: Thank you for reading and commenting though, I appreciate your thoughts. :hug:
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rainismysunshine Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I thought it said 'Stories To Tell Your Chicken.' 
I thought it was going to be a comedy. 
What's wrong with me?
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7of9123 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is very strong. Impressive. Touching.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
:thanks: Thank you. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.
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Sierraness23 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent excellent work. Very relatable for many of us that have had a less-than-perfect experience with faith.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
Thank you. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. :)
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GDeyke Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
This is beautiful. My favorite bit: My stomach felt hollow. Something missing, always missing, but it had never fit quite right in the first place. Thank you for sharing this.

(And congratulations on the DD! I'm glad it gave me the excuse to read something older of yours.)
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
And thank you for reading! This is a dusty one, but I'm glad so many people seem to be finding something valuable in it. :heart:
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psycocat Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I think I could easily write a similar bit a prose that would be the opposite (but I won't, why ruin what is here?) but only because my experiences are so different.  And yet that last line speaks volumes.

Christ died alone.  He asks us to pray alone as well as in public and I still believe it is easier to hear the spirit when I am alone.  I feel like there should be more alones in this vein, but I can't think of them right now.

Parts of this prose break my heart, but even then here at the end there is hope, or at least I feel there is.  Am I babbling?  Whatever.  Love this.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment and share your experience -- it's interesting how yours and mine are so different. I really appreciate your kind response. :hug:
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psycocat Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Of course!  There is absolutely no reason to not give a kind response.  :)
I believe we are all siblings, and we ought to treat each other with love and kindness.
I know we all fail each once in a while, but we must try and pick ourselves up, and that is what matters.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013   Writer
:hug:
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StarDragonBlue Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so very much for writing this. This means a lot to me. I was raised as a Protestant Fundamentalist, and was quite devout... I went through so many of the same sensations and conclusions. Finding someone else who's had the same intense experience is kind of like being in a foreign country and finding a fellow native speaker.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! What you said about being in a foreign country -- that's definitely what I'm experiencing reading through the comments I've gotten on this piece. It's so nice knowing you're not alone. :hug:
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StarDragonBlue Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Take care, friend! :)
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EsebeiDoran Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can really relate to this. Except that I was in a public school from 1st to 8th. Then I went to a Catholic High School. There were SO many rules  to follow. Most were reasonable. The little ones bothered me like "Not allowed to dye your hair" Which is the one rule that I didn't like, cuz I liked coloring my hair. It wasn't fair that teachers were an exception. Sometimes I was able to pull of a few lighter shades than my original color. But it was very minimum. Of course, our Catholic high school required students to wear uniforms. Which were very unflattering. But living in a humid island, it makes sense to wear polo and long black slacks; while the girls suffered the shapeless box looking white blouses and square, one inch below the knee, burgundy, skirt. Religion classes were easy. Questions that were asked, you'd think, "What would Jesus do?" Every 1st Monday of the month was mass. So we had to cross the street to get to church in the mornings. Masses were held, not only on the first Monday of the month. But they were held on holy-days and special occasions. Sometimes when we have guest visits from another out of the country church member. Every thing was so automatic when in school. But more brighter.

Now that I've graduated out of high school. I just feel... lost. Just having repeatable questions that goes unanswered. Prayers, that used to be recited, are no longer chanted. It's as if you came out of something that meant something, to questioning "Why isn't it still there?"

Blah. I don't know. But this really sums up to how I feel about now.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment and share your experiences, I really do appreciate it. If it helps you any, I still don't know, either. :hug:
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JERUKA9 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
be wht you want become for me its doesend matter im becom buddhist
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
That's awesome! :D
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A really well deserved DD! As a former Christian, I can relate to many things you've described. I was raised a Protestant, but most of the imagery is the same, a lot of my disappointments, traumas, poems and philosophical musings have been centered around the same symbols. How differently I see a cross, for example, than someone without religious upbringing, with all my own personal, mundane disappointments clinging to it. I like the way you've added natural, simple and personal perspectives on the sacraments depicted as concrete, tactile memories, it gives the piece structure.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
Thank you! I really appreciate your taking the time to read and comment and share your experiences. There's a strange comfort to me in reading all the comments I've gotten on this piece and realizing that I'm not alone in thinking these things at all. :hug:
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Chrysalite Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. :) Yeah, I can understand that! :hug: Keep on creating!
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Eventhorizon6 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Student Writer
This...I can't even...it's...perfect.
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
:blush: Thank you. :hug:
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Eventhorizon6 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Student Writer
You're welcome :)
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offermoord Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
Very great writing! 
At first I sensed sarcasm in the title 'stories you tell your children', but later it came to me very true... 
In my eyes religious dogma is a far too heavy burden to lay on children, it should in fact be labeled 'Mature Content'...
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. :hug:

As I've gotten older I wonder if it wouldn't be better for children to grow up and then pick a religion for themselves (if they wanted one), but I guess to most people that wouldn't work. =p
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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SadisticIceCream Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013   Writer
:blush: Thank you!
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katleidoscopic Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, I can't read it.  :c  I'm sure it's awesome, though!
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Rechenka Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2013
Just 1 more month until I can read it! XD
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katleidoscopic Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lucky. -.-"
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